Temetwir

23.4.06

غلطة عمر

- Two days later -

She lay still in bed, staring at the cieling. So much was on her mind on so little of a subject it was driving her crazy since she could not focus nor think on anything but what happened. It was more or less like being paranoid, where everything is possible to ensue because of her knowledge and ackowledgement of a mistake done. Okay, a mishap, perhaps. If that, some might say.
She stopped nibbling on her finger, ran her hands in her hair and rested her palms on her forehead. Slowly, they dragged themselves to cover her eyes and the tears.
Faisal rolled over next to her, eyes half-open he asked "what time is it? Honey what's wrong?"

- Three years prior -

He spinned his mobile on the table. It banged on the plates every now and then but he didn't care. There were more important things on his mind. Like how lucky he was about to get if he knew how to "yesayis omoorah". He sucked down on the straw, and let his mind drift.
She opened the cabinet's revolving door and sat across of him. She looked fresh. For lack of a better word, Yosif thought. He smiled, "meshaina?"

- Yesterday -

She walked into Il Rayah with her arm locked in Faisal's, leaning her head up against his shoulder. She apparently told him something that made him put his hand on her belly. Instantly, he smiled.
They proceeded to the escalators going up.
Greeting them at the top was Dalal, her friend's friend. The two young ladies gasped in surprise and proceded to hug and kiss. Dalal congratulated her, looking at her belly. She bent her head and smiled, thanking Dalal.
When she looked up, she felt dizzy as things went blank. Sounds muted. People went out of focus. Fixated, there, Yosif, in front of her. Holding Dalal's hand, as if coming out of no where.
"Bo ya3gob!", she heard a familiar voice inside her head say. She looked around blindly, only to see Faisal shake hands with the familiar man, "wainek ma gemt tbayen 3endina.."

- Next week -

Yosif held Dalal's hand and moved it away from his chest. "Not tonight baby" he excused. Dalal recollected herself and sat up, blowing it off in asking if his backache was gone or if he needed the 'thing with the smell' rubbed tonight too. He shook his head and got out of bed, proceeding to a nearby chair with his training pants folded neatly upon. He put on some clothes and came to Dalal's side of bed kissing her forehead "I'll see you later okay?"
Dalal didn't bother answering and was already switching through channels.

- One year and a half earlier -

"Cham jawla bageelek oboy?", he asked.
"Thalaath, dish ma3ay 7ayaak", came the answer.
The two spotted each other climbing up the weights on the bar. "Jadwelek elyom bi o sadir o mi3da?", he asked. The addressee nodded, inviting him to work out together today. "Ila ma geltly shesmik bel khair?", asked Faisal.
"Yosif, Yosif 3abdalla," he replied.


15 Comments:

  • I second zinzin. I was like "Whoa, we're here now...all right" and "Oh so it's like that?"
    And I don't mean to sound...whatever but what's the thing with the smell??

    By Blogger Erzulie, at 23.4.06  

  • So Yosif is feeling regret now, after all that's passed and was done?

    -Saph who's being eaten by finals (ed3ooli!)

    By Anonymous Anonymous, at 23.4.06  

  • This post made me feel so stupid, but I'll blame it on the bad coffee I had this morning.

    What is going on?

    By Blogger ScarlO, at 24.4.06  

  • I think it's just right the way you posted it...

    I'm heart broken already without even knowing what details u left out.. but can I say.. I have an extremelly active imagination...

    ishda3wa ma gharart oooo kamaalt ilsalfa all in my head already :P

    By Blogger DiiGMaa, at 24.4.06  

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    By Blogger Temetwir, at 24.4.06  

  • My bad, thought it was a 'story'. That technique works well, I must admit. Now that I read your reply and re-read the story, it is starting to make sense. We don't see beneath the surface.

    Hmmm, will probably use your technique for a future post ..

    By Blogger ScarlO, at 24.4.06  

  • scarlo
    chairz

    laialy
    yes, ppl make mistakes
    and yes, they may learn from their mistakes..
    and yes, taabaw toba saal7ah and wont do it again..

    but that still doesnt make it "perfectly fine" in real life because u never know how it's going to end up

    the point is to illustrate THAT (that admitting ur mistakes may not be enough) because you never can anticipate every single scenario and then put every single solution

    short example:
    u kill a 45 yr old lady who has a 10 yr old son
    15 yrs later, u marry that son
    3 yrs later, the son knows u killed his mother (regardless of how or why or whatever)
    what does ur apology/admittance do now? in reality and not just to 'come to terms with god'

    it isnt abt preaching "dont fuck up", not at all
    its just saying (way i c it at least): what u do, can never be undone later on in time

    be it good or bad, who cares, thats not the point

    chairz

    By Blogger Temetwir, at 24.4.06  

  • zinzin
    yes i know what u mean, but then again that would give a whole different 'story' altogether when this isnt abt telling a story of a girl named dalal or a guy called faisal
    if it was that, then yes i agree.. but since it isnt, the 'chronological order' would have a whole diff meaning

    erzulie
    lets just say if u knew all 4 .. u would get the jist in similar installments..
    hence the narrator knows all 4, and saying it how it is..
    its not meant to 'sound smart', its just messy like how things really happen and not necessarily "in order"
    *thing with smell = marham 7ag el thahar .. cant remember the name of the brand/product i have in mind, apologies

    laialy
    whatever decisions u make when ur 'young' and 'experimenting', doesnt convert a wrong decision into a right one, under no circumstances in the future.. i.e. saying u were young and experimenting doesnt give u a pass becoz things rnt "as clear cut" .. like in this example where 'everybody knows everybody 3 yrs later' .. who wouldve imagined?
    i.e. would they have done whatever-it-is they did now? no? why not? becoz its wrong? ok, it was wrong 3yrs ago too..

    sapphire
    i dunno u tell me, what has passed? what was done?
    i dont know
    *imwafega inshala all the best, ba3th ilnas still havent done their assignments

    scarlo
    i dunno u tell me
    lets just say, if u were in ilrayah, and u saw the pair-of-couples, then u wouldnt know of any underlying stuff going on until u go forward in time (2 days, 1 week) and go back in time (1.5yrs, 3yrs, and yesterday)

    its not a 'story'

    digma
    thats the spirit ..
    like i said above its not "a story" so really there isnt a start-conflict-climax-end.. its not abt that..
    fa bel3aks good going at making up ur mind on a whole scenario

    By Blogger Temetwir, at 24.4.06  

  • Okay the following question may be extremely retarded, and if it is i blame it on the studying/lack of sleep

    I understand its supposed to be a mistake that they canoodled, and that shes pregnant, but if its so illegal why would people be congratulating her? thats the part that throw me off

    I have to say i love the first paragraph :D comes as a surprise though the 2nd i read the title "gal6t 3mr" i knew someone somewhere was pregnant!

    By Blogger Faith, at 24.4.06  

  • faith
    yeah .. go back to sleep :|
    'she' is married to Faisal
    i never said they ('she' + yosif) "canoodled" .. i never actually said who the girl at the restaurant was with yosif

    for all i know, it could be 'her', it could be dalal, it could be a third, a fourth, it can even be his sister for all i know
    hence: there is no story :)

    a series of events, happening at diff points of time, with a limited number of characters and nothing but the reader's perception of "whats up" if the reader was given these events in no particular order.. which is basically how real life works (for me , at least)

    laialy
    the fact that ur still thinking is all i could have hoped for .. kel wa7da (in the case of u ladies) 3ala kaifha etfasir ely tabeeh + gets out ely tabeeh within a certain frame

    as for u killing the lady example, looking back, the best thing u could have done was to admit what u did at that point in time .. to live guilt-free or free of something EVER happening that can be related to what u 'have done'

    it seems plausible to me that THAT IS how life works .. only thing left now for u to ask urself: is that how u see it too? is it not? is it all rubbish?

    who is to say .. :)

    By Blogger Temetwir, at 24.4.06  

  • I had to read that a few times. It sort of reinforces an idea that I personally find very scary.

    One cannot move on and let go of things that happened in the past. Whether we regret it or not, whats done is done, we just have to accept it...there's no "undo" button...oh and also the fact that it's such a small world.

    By Blogger Sedna, at 24.4.06  

  • the order of the story kinda confused me ... nice story but for some reason i don't feel it... its not a true one is it ?

    By Blogger Mother Courage, at 24.4.06  

  • sedna
    yes indeed, i think ur the 1st to bring up the fact that it IS a small world, especially 'where we come from' ..
    the undo button was a nice way of putting it

    mother c
    didnt quite understand what ur not feeling, sorry come again?
    and nop, its not true..
    like i said (3 times already i think) there is no 'story':)

    By Blogger Temetwir, at 24.4.06  

  • WOW..... love ur way of switching times although its bit confusing ... bas all in all good :)

    By Blogger متفرغ, at 24.4.06  

  • metfarigh
    teslam 7abeeb ilsha3b :)

    laialy
    there is no spoon

    By Blogger Temetwir, at 24.4.06  

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